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Show Raw Emotion

Welcome back, owlnerds. Its been awhile. I recently read a story from Olivia J. Bennett and made me realize we should express raw emotion. Real emotion. We should dig through all the thoughts and put them on paper. To have realistic characters, we need to understand what the character is going through.

And times, we don’t share this emotion or thoughts because it isn’t vital to the plot itself. Maybe it is.

Ex.

The world was collapsing and she with it. Gripping her cheeks as she screamed. It can be happening. He can’t be dead. Flashes of red, white, and blue covered the scene as everything happened so fast. Her body shook as paramedics began to talk to her as they questioned what just happened. Seeing blurrier figures walk toward him. She rose as she screamed at them. “Get away from him.” Her eyes looked behind her as some of the paramedics grabbed her as they pulled her into the ambulance. No, don’t dare put me in there. He needs me. He will wake up and will wonder where I. She slammed on the doors of the ambulance as they shut the door. “No, you fools. He needs me.” Falling to her knees as she continuously mumbled to herself, “No. He can’t be dead. No. He can’t die. I need him. What am I going to do without him.” (FYI, I was going to write a war battle scene, but since they were going to brutally wound description. I gave you this emotional sad scene.)

Raw Emotion or Show not tell. I currently question whether or change my title. Just trying to show some originality or attempting to. What I stated before “we need to understand what the character is going through. ” I know people say you need the experience to write certain things. I usually imagine what if I was in that situation what would I do. Or if you can’t do that, ask someone. I am sure someone could tell what they would do or feel in that situation.

I know for a fact that showing and telling is difficult even I struggle with it. I think if we write one step at a time. I know you want to finish your draft as soon as possible well I was there too. If we take each scene slowly and feel like the character themselves we will have less editing to do.

That is all for today’s post. Let me know, what you would like to see next.